all nouns of the world be sleeve
trodden way into this snapclasp
ocean underwhelming your ruin
bland oats alive in your hair
conifer & east orange mirage
bought the intersecting moment, flayed
caught in ascent descent evenly over
tendrils, calamity against white fin
spaced & from your body
because it already happened once
ask yourself commensurately
if the blacktop is how you remember it
pick some electric entanglement
to dwell on: hubcap unexpected shrub wisp
of flower name it for
your speaking tongue but hiding calyx
what's lacking pistil sigmata filament
blackest fireshadow when you say "hurry, hurry"
Mojave curative venous & anthropic
rectangular system of circles in waves
this firefly scrim stars all
into you like a kickback and ride
the ablated wreckage we share ash
forehead open and glowing, the burn
clasped around you Athenic arrow
bent the curve of your earlobe blends
seuthanizing the soft woods
become puddles of speaking planks
residual trance carved coagulus
yellow bride yellow whites
guessing you & I meres of one another
of others you and I are action
bitter cactus tongues
in the garden in the sounding siren
trodden way into this snapclasp
ocean underwhelming your ruin
bland oats alive in your hair
conifer & east orange mirage
bought the intersecting moment, flayed
caught in ascent descent evenly over
tendrils, calamity against white fin
spaced & from your body
because it already happened once
ask yourself commensurately
if the blacktop is how you remember it
pick some electric entanglement
to dwell on: hubcap unexpected shrub wisp
of flower name it for
your speaking tongue but hiding calyx
what's lacking pistil sigmata filament
blackest fireshadow when you say "hurry, hurry"
Mojave curative venous & anthropic
rectangular system of circles in waves
this firefly scrim stars all
into you like a kickback and ride
the ablated wreckage we share ash
forehead open and glowing, the burn
clasped around you Athenic arrow
bent the curve of your earlobe blends
seuthanizing the soft woods
become puddles of speaking planks
residual trance carved coagulus
yellow bride yellow whites
guessing you & I meres of one another
of others you and I are action
bitter cactus tongues
in the garden in the sounding siren
1 Comments:
I left most of your lines pretty much exactly the same with a few exceptions where I had to omit a few words for flow-sake. Also had to change an "into" into "around" because we had like four "into"s between the two of us. Anyway, see what you think and adjust at will. I think it's pretty interesting. Even almost has a narrative to it, which is different for us.
Post a Comment
<< Home