interweave #2
against the image of goldenshower
i apply my dereliction to you
untying knots of fountainspray,
backward dunes
unraveling after we read
the gaping verb, muscular node
asterisk become a planet, if
and this "if" of splendor
sinks back into its vertebrae,
where we crimp
burgeoning gardenias. Singular helix
of whitewash, and ice. Give me
sacrificial arteries, your eyelashes
brimming with winter
slender sores of the finite,
these were blood and bark,
slanting, gouged, labeled
yellow bruise as "dying"
peels, climbing interruption
the purest blank
speck of tongue sparkling
as consciously
on my cheek in shame
and what we do--
ever-filtered gallows,
you and i, parabolic,
artificial mappings of
copper-plated skies
i apply my dereliction to you
untying knots of fountainspray,
backward dunes
unraveling after we read
the gaping verb, muscular node
asterisk become a planet, if
and this "if" of splendor
sinks back into its vertebrae,
where we crimp
burgeoning gardenias. Singular helix
of whitewash, and ice. Give me
sacrificial arteries, your eyelashes
brimming with winter
slender sores of the finite,
these were blood and bark,
slanting, gouged, labeled
yellow bruise as "dying"
peels, climbing interruption
the purest blank
speck of tongue sparkling
as consciously
on my cheek in shame
and what we do--
ever-filtered gallows,
you and i, parabolic,
artificial mappings of
copper-plated skies
posted by Scott Glassman at 3:35 PM
6 Comments:
I think this is stunning, though I don't know if that's allowed since I wrote some of it. What now? Should we try to send it off somewhere? Write some more, maybe? It was fun.
Can we put "Your eyelashes/ brimming with winter" back in? I really love that part.
yeah, can you put the eyelashes part back in? i forget where it goes. let's do some more, get a bunch together, and send them off-- nice that you're back!
i put the eyelashes brimming with winter back in-- what should we call this?
Hmm, a title? Should we look into composing a series and then having more of an overarching title and numbering them? I like the general idea of "interweave #2," something like it. As a series, it might be interesting to include the different "drafts" so to speak, so that the actual project reflects the process. A friend of mine, Chicu Reddy, did this with a series of poems I heard him read recently and I thought it was really interesting. Ours would have a different spin, but even better.
i like the idea of a numbered series with an over-arching title-- yeah we should go with that
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